RED MEAT Like Selling Freedom Fries To The French (MMD re-write) from the secret files of max cannon
William's gonna love the puppy I bought him for his Birthday this year.
I'm sure he will Ted... If you remembered to make air holes in the box this year.
Sure did Dan, I'm not stupid enough to make the same mistake twice.
I'd never suggest such a thing... and your not stupid enough to stab the holes while the puppy's in the box are you?
Ahhh nuts! What a waste.
I wouldn't say that Ted, it happens to be the perfect present for a little girl I know. Take it off your hands?
2003-07-11 02:53:26By Chris Bourke

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8To quote Jar Jar "This be loverly!" - Stonent
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7Your writing is a touch loose/sloppy, but it should get better w/ practice. -PB
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7much better!
7It's better, but the grammar still needs work.
7I like this one better. -DB
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7-1 for "your" but a great strip otherwise. --John
7better interaction than the orig.
7MMD 3 is classic. Ted 3 is not quite him. Preloggy
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6your and you're... two different words, good timing though
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6The "ahh nuts" line is one i became famous for in college.
5Clean up the writing and this will be great. But clean up the writing! --VX
5"your" mistake is another pet peeve; loose writing in 3 but decent punch -bbg
5The spelling and punctuation make baby Jesus cry
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5grammar grammar grammar...
5Grammar's still bad, and MMD just makes it predictable -- jnc
5No better, and loses points because "your" != "you're" unless you're 13.
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4wretched writing
3Flip the two around, then MAYBE you'll have something. -DG

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